Here is another rhetorical tip to consider: You said, “although men will have to give up certain privileges”. Men don’t necessarily have to give up privilege. They share it. Though grammatically, you are correct to say that, it is open to misunderstanding. If I have clean water and you don’t, I have a privilege. If you get clean water, I did not lose my clean water. Say, “share privilege” and you make people less defensive and it helps get people on your side. Technically, when you get clean water I don’t have a privilege anymore. But sometimes it is better to convey the meaning we intend than open our selves up for contention.